The Last Stanza
Pendulum
Here, there
And again here
Belongs nowhere.
Suyog Shrestha
Suyog Shrestha looks after the graphics and art section for V.E.N.T! He is a champion excuse seeker. He is also very good at extending deadlines. Yet, he always comes up with the necessary artwork in the nick of time, thus saving the day. He always has three things to say about everything, not more not less. He is an accidental poet. He enjoys writing haiku, blank verses and tries to combine them with visual art. In his free time, he enjoys reading management case studies and business journal. Contact him at suyog AT ventzine DOT com.
( Jul 1st 2009, 11:44 AM ) says:
amazing short poem very grabbing. enjoyed very much. thank you.
( Jul 1st 2009, 12:45 PM ) says:
Suyog, I like the concreteness your verse presents and the culmination in the last line. The image is stark, vivid, simple yet profound. I like the simplicity of your words, the clutter-less feeling I got when I went through your words. I would want to ask you something, however. I got an impression of haiku in the above verses. I am not sure of this though. Mostly on with verses like these, you've got to work hard on the last line, that's where the impact lies in. The last line is the culmination of the two that precedes it. I was rather put off by the last time. If you can add a more punch on the last line, a tour de force as it were, it'd definitely make it more interesting. Even if you are not chasing haiku dreams, I have an inkling that you'll make much of the resources I'm sharing. Search for Haiku theory on deviantart. It's on this artists gallery : solarts. And, yes, it says so much about your appreciation of dear ol' Bhupi. Keep on writing dude. I love to see how you progress on your writing skills. Rishi
( Jul 2nd 2009, 03:52 PM ) says:
Nice one, Suyog! I liked it! The ending is punchy!
( Jul 11th 2009, 02:52 PM ) says:
"B E L O N G S N OW H E R E" Liked it. such a meaningful poem...loved it....
( Jul 15th 2009, 09:29 PM ) says:
short and touchy.........
so short, yet i can feel every word if it. "Belongs nowhere..." loved that part. keep writing more poems!!